How I celebrated National Day

Journal entry for school

1st draft (unedited)

I celebrated National Day in school. We went to the school hall to sing the National Anthem, waited for our vice-principal, Miss Sim to give a speech and sing songs.

Then we went to the field to celebrate Sports Day. You will have to put the ball under your legs then hop to the first hula hoop, throw it up in the air 3 times then put it under your legs again, hop to the second hula hoop, turn it round your wist 3 time then run back to our group and pass it to our next group mates. My father and mother were there too! My father talk to Dong Han and Chongqing Shing about their life. Then we did the mexican wave then Mr Ngoh came to give the prizes.

The weather was fine and sunny and I enjoyed the games very much.

Final copy

I celebrated National Day in school. Early in the morning, we went to the school hall to sing National Anthem, waited for our vice-principal, Miss Sim to give a speech and sing National day songs such as 'In a Heartbeat' and 'Home'.

Then we went to the field to celebrate Sports Day. The game we played needed us to put the ball under our legs then hop to the first hula hoop, throw it up in the air three times then put under our legs again' hop to the second hula hoop, turn it round our waist three times then run back to our group and pass it to our next group mate. My father and mother were there too! My father talked to Dong Han and Ching Shing about school life. Ten. Did the Mexican wave and Mr Ngoh came to give out the medals. I lost but I felt happy because I like sports.

The weather was fine and sunny. I enjoyed the games very much.